That was an amazing journey. Readers might wonder if this was a dream, but you are clear in the end that the narrator's parents thought he was dead. This is a kind of a parable. It has a lesson. Unlike many stories with lessons, this is interesting. It holds the reader's interest.
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Wow, what an intense story, @ubani. It's great that he has a second chance at life in the end!
Do you use Google Docs to draft your stories? I'm sure we have recommended it to you before. It's a great way to find and fix errors in your story. (You can read about it here). Here's a sentence that is a bit confusing because I think some of the words are not right.
Manipulation and deceit, but I had to live like that in other to be at peace with my worldly friends even though many peaches against such act.
I think you mean "in order to be at peace" in the first italicized phrase. And I'm not sure about the second one. The word "peaches" is a type of fruit. Maybe you meant "preaches"?
I hope those suggestions are helpful! Great story!
Dead or Dream, a second chance that could make us realize all the mistakes we did is a blessing. All we need to do is make the proper use of that and correct the wrongs we did.
Story with a valuable lesson, enjoyed while reading.
That "Kiss-thing has happened with me as well" Jk. haha
I loved the contrasting purpose between the two lives you trying to bend in. I feel.
It's an interesting one with a second chance. Kept me hooked throughout.
That was an amazing journey. Readers might wonder if this was a dream, but you are clear in the end that the narrator's parents thought he was dead. This is a kind of a parable. It has a lesson. Unlike many stories with lessons, this is interesting. It holds the reader's interest.
Thank you for posting this story in the Ink Well community. We appreciate that you engage with other writers.
Wow, what an intense story, @ubani. It's great that he has a second chance at life in the end!
Do you use Google Docs to draft your stories? I'm sure we have recommended it to you before. It's a great way to find and fix errors in your story. (You can read about it here). Here's a sentence that is a bit confusing because I think some of the words are not right.
I think you mean "in order to be at peace" in the first italicized phrase. And I'm not sure about the second one. The word "peaches" is a type of fruit. Maybe you meant "preaches"?
I hope those suggestions are helpful! Great story!
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Dead or Dream, a second chance that could make us realize all the mistakes we did is a blessing. All we need to do is make the proper use of that and correct the wrongs we did.
Story with a valuable lesson, enjoyed while reading.
True,
It's my pleasure.
I love this story
That "Kiss-thing has happened with me as well" Jk. haha
I loved the contrasting purpose between the two lives you trying to bend in. I feel.
It's an interesting one with a second chance. Kept me hooked throughout.