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RE: Commentary on a verse I found in ruins beside a winding path

Love is ever new;
turn from bitter rage.
I look now to you —
fill the fervent page
with feeling true and deep:
heartbreak, do not keep
cold-hid within a vault,
firm-locked from every touch.
Forgive each past assault
and know, be sure all such
contortions shall unwind
and traceless — waxlike, smooth
will melt each brittle bind:
life unexpected, soothe
and make you new again.

This is not just beautiful, it's soothing and totally rhythmic to the ears when read aloud. I love the really simple rhymes with the how the lines ran on to the next lines, again and again. The alliteration and the simplicity of the verse itself is beautiful it was like experience something beautiful from the start.
I'm someone who looks at the ways words are used in poems and how they're constructed too. This one is one of them. Totally beautiful if you ask me.