This is an inspiring story. A tragedy befalls a family and together the family overcomes obstacles. The father's dedication to the son is admirable, as is the son's desire to please his father. In the end, readers are gratified to learn that David can walk again. His example truly is a light to the world.
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@cryptofi I read your work carefully and I really think you could spend more time on each story. You could dwell more on each action so that the reader has time and subjective material to internalise and believe in your characters.
Hello cryptofi,
I read your story with particular interest because one of my brothers became seriously ill when he was a child. He wasn't paralyzed but suffered such severe damage to his heart that for several years he was an invalid. He also had no money, but struggled to succeed. Today he is a grandfather of seven children and he has a successful business to his credit. So, you see, the arc of his life very much paralleled the arc of David's life. Your story is fiction, but so real for many people.
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This is an inspiring story. A tragedy befalls a family and together the family overcomes obstacles. The father's dedication to the son is admirable, as is the son's desire to please his father. In the end, readers are gratified to learn that David can walk again. His example truly is a light to the world.
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@cryptofi I read your work carefully and I really think you could spend more time on each story. You could dwell more on each action so that the reader has time and subjective material to internalise and believe in your characters.
Hello cryptofi,
I read your story with particular interest because one of my brothers became seriously ill when he was a child. He wasn't paralyzed but suffered such severe damage to his heart that for several years he was an invalid. He also had no money, but struggled to succeed. Today he is a grandfather of seven children and he has a successful business to his credit. So, you see, the arc of his life very much paralleled the arc of David's life. Your story is fiction, but so real for many people.
Thank you for sharing this inspiring story.
Thank you for bringing us your original work, @cryptofi. I hope to see your imagination and writing skill grow.
Remember to check out the tools for helping with writing and grammar in this post: Help for the Grammatically Challenged. If you use Google docs to draft your content, it will point out errors and you can fix them.