I don't know how you do that. How you draw me in so that I have to follow the story to the end. How you end the story, and leave me completely satisfied with the resolution. How you manage, in the space of one paragraph, to set the scene so I know this man O'Meara, and I understand the circumstance in which we find him.
Oh, wait a minute. You are a great writer. That's how you do it. It does seem effortless but I understand the great care and attention that go into crafting such a well-constructed story. Talent and skill are not enough
Great job, @jayna. If only I were a whale and could reward this the way it deserves to be rewarded.
Action, Dialog and Narrative. The three elements in this week's prompt. It might be said that you seamlessly integrate these into your story. But, of course you do. They are basic to a story, although not every story has all the elements.
One might add character portrayal, also, as an outstanding element in this story. Because even more than action, the story offers insight into Officer O'Meara. His distress, his conflict, is clear. We understand his motivation, even as he stops to help a driver he suspects may be in trouble. And we understand how music, the words of a song, help to provide the bridge to resolution.
Thank you! I have found in my travels along the writer's journey that short stories feel most satisfying to me when they have two conflicts — in this case, the scene O'Meara comes upon and how to deal with it, and his own inner conflict and pain. By the end my hope is that they co-resolve.
You bring us a sensitive story, @jayna.
A story, impeccably told, that delves into the deep feelings of two strangers. The story flows very naturally, with powerful images like the one in which O'Meara breaks the dam of his emotions.
I admire the subtlety of the actions told here.
But then their eyes meet. Watkins looks at him from the corner of his eye. And O'Meara knows he can see everything. He knows he is not alone in his pain.
That was beautiful. And riveting. And poignant. Awe, heck, it was a cornucopia feels @jayna, I loved every word. Those moments where Life slaps you in the existential core are my favorite and most transformative and you portrayed that phenomenon marvelously with Officer O’Meara’s drive.
Thank you so much for that very lovely comment, @generikat! It is every writer's wish to write with impact. If we achieve it in some small measure, it is a great day. Thank you for reading!
Hello @jayna, this is a true portrayal of the week's prompt. Also including conflict and resolution , making it the perfect story😁
I really feel for O'meara, and everything he goes through. And i really like the ending, i smiled when i got there.
The Sam Smith bit was on flick as well, went really well with the mood the story had created🤗
Thank you for reading the story, @ubani1. Yes, those Sam Smith songs can certainly bring our losses back to our consciousness. I find music to be very powerful, in its effect on emotions. Smith is a master at that.
I don't know how you do that. How you draw me in so that I have to follow the story to the end. How you end the story, and leave me completely satisfied with the resolution. How you manage, in the space of one paragraph, to set the scene so I know this man O'Meara, and I understand the circumstance in which we find him.
Oh, wait a minute. You are a great writer. That's how you do it. It does seem effortless but I understand the great care and attention that go into crafting such a well-constructed story. Talent and skill are not enough
Great job, @jayna. If only I were a whale and could reward this the way it deserves to be rewarded.
You are such a dear, @agmoore. You leave the most gratifying comments. Thank you!
Every word true :)
Action, Dialog and Narrative. The three elements in this week's prompt. It might be said that you seamlessly integrate these into your story. But, of course you do. They are basic to a story, although not every story has all the elements.
One might add character portrayal, also, as an outstanding element in this story. Because even more than action, the story offers insight into Officer O'Meara. His distress, his conflict, is clear. We understand his motivation, even as he stops to help a driver he suspects may be in trouble. And we understand how music, the words of a song, help to provide the bridge to resolution.
A skillfully crafted, effective story.
Thank you! I have found in my travels along the writer's journey that short stories feel most satisfying to me when they have two conflicts — in this case, the scene O'Meara comes upon and how to deal with it, and his own inner conflict and pain. By the end my hope is that they co-resolve.
You bring us a sensitive story, @jayna.
A story, impeccably told, that delves into the deep feelings of two strangers. The story flows very naturally, with powerful images like the one in which O'Meara breaks the dam of his emotions.
I admire the subtlety of the actions told here.
Thank you for your delightful comment, @gracielaacevedo. I truly appreciate your support!
That was beautiful. And riveting. And poignant. Awe, heck, it was a cornucopia feels @jayna, I loved every word. Those moments where Life slaps you in the existential core are my favorite and most transformative and you portrayed that phenomenon marvelously with Officer O’Meara’s drive.
Awesome tale!
Thank you so much for that very lovely comment, @generikat! It is every writer's wish to write with impact. If we achieve it in some small measure, it is a great day. Thank you for reading!
A very moving story that pulled me in from the beginning. When O'Meara choked out a sob I also felt choked up! Thank you for this.
Thank you for that wonderful comment, @saronaspecial, and for taking the time to read my story and comment. I truly appreciate it!
Hello @jayna, this is a true portrayal of the week's prompt. Also including conflict and resolution , making it the perfect story😁
I really feel for O'meara, and everything he goes through. And i really like the ending, i smiled when i got there.
The Sam Smith bit was on flick as well, went really well with the mood the story had created🤗
Thanks very much for reading and commenting, @bruno-kema. I’m glad you enjoyed the story!
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Thank you for reading the story, @ubani1. Yes, those Sam Smith songs can certainly bring our losses back to our consciousness. I find music to be very powerful, in its effect on emotions. Smith is a master at that.