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This is my publication in response to the fast and furious festival task of the theinkwell community. The festival aims to challenge writers to write at least 25 minutes a day (or more if you wish) following the day's assignments.
My task on day 4 is to work on the Story Arc
Task - Day Four Prompt - Story Arc
When talking about the structure of a short story, we tend to talk more about story arc than about plot. The reason for this is ... your story must include an arc to be effective and to leave the reader satisfied that the time it took to read your story (vs. the thousand other things he or she may have chosen instead) was worth the journey.
Ink Well Fast and Furious Festival Quote - Day Four
Each long or short story must have at least one character, a problem that the protagonist must face, an obstacle (plot), a secondary character and the resolution of the problem.
During these 4 days of the Fast and Furious Inkwell Festival, I was able to learn about the importance of character description, the environment, the different styles of writers, and finally the arc of the story.
The task of day 4 offers a series of elements to choose those that the writer likes and to arm his story, putting in practice the learned in previous days.
These were the ones I chose for my story.
A. My main character is: A rich yacht owner
B. My character's problem is: Unable to recover from a loss
C. My character is living with, encountering or at odds with: High school fling.
D. The thing preventing my character from solving their problem is: Alcoholism
Practicing what I learned on these days I share with you the following story.
Answer
The Yacht Millionaire
Breakfast is ready Mr. George, says softly the lady of the service when she knocks on the door of the cabin, she does not want to upset her boss she knows that her mood has declined in recent months.
After George the loss of her daughter, he blames herself for not having recognized her because she was the product of an affair in high school.
George found out about his girlfriend Hazel's pregnancy but doubted the feelings she claimed to have for him. He always thought that because he had an inheritance he was being sought after out of interest.
One day the phone rang, "Mr. George, I am sorry to inform you that your daughter Hazel is ill with cancer and is terminally ill in her final days, she wishes to meet you".
Without hesitation George answered his call, although he was in the Bay on his favorite yacht, the largest and most luxurious one he had, he spent his days at sea contemplating the stars alone, he liked to walk and party with friends on his yacht, at those moments he felt accepted and could show off his collection of small and large yachts, that day he was several miles away but the speed of his response was not enough to get there in time. Hazel was lying dead in the hospital
Heartbroken George immersed himself in the deceptive feeling of well-being that liquor gives, slowly ending any motivation, regretting the decision he made in his past, insecure and immature valuing the material, forgetting the most precious thing, the love of a loved one. The remorse succumbed him in a worse and worse state, he stopped bathing, with time his hair and beard grew and his millionaire appearance was lost. Only the shadows remain and the image he showed for years collapsed looking like a man lost in alcohol.
Thank you very much for reading me.
The image used today is pixabay free license and was edited by me with the program canva the author credits under the image. If you want to participate in this or the next writing challenges you can go to The Ink Well Fast and Furious festival page or to the challenge page on day three.
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Nice story @soyunasantacruz The rich man was so worried someone only wanted him for his money, he couldn't recognize love when his daughter appeared. It didn't appear that she wanted anything from him; just the love of a father.
I can see he realized his mistake in the end. All the money in the world can't help you if you immerse yourself in alcohol.
I think the translation was a bit off because in your first paragraph I was thinking the daughter belonged to the maid:
It's only after reaching the second paragraph that I realized the daughter belongs to the yacht owner.
Thanks for your story. It has a good moral value to it.
Hello @justclickindiva,
You show great support to other writers in your consistent comments. Thank you!
Oh yes a writing and grammar mistake. I have to check, thank you very much.
Although I can read some things in English, I actually write in English with the help of a translator and try to read paragraph by paragraph, sometimes I change words. It is not easy but I have my satisfaction when someone understands me.
You understand even my mistakes 😜🤣🙈 thank you very much. @justclickindiva
Yes, that happens to me frequently. I read numerous stories from translations and know that the translators don't pick up the pronouns correctly. A person can still figure out what the story means though sometimes.
Others will read my story and often not mention the translation errors, so I think everything is done correctly. To point out each issue can be time consuming.
Yes, ma'am, that's right. Thank you for this feedback.
So sad ... and yet, the story has its own inevitable logic, because not all people come to a happy ending ... sometimes, the consequences of sins indulged because a person thinks they are too rich, too young, too this, and too that to face those consequences break a person in the end ... people do become entombed in their consequences. I cannot say that I enjoyed this story, but it is a story to be understood as an important lesson, presented well. Well done.
Part of life is knowing that not all endings are happy and that is the reality.
Writing how I would deal with the problem would have been an expected outcome, but an alcoholic without a family is very difficult to get out of trouble, so I decided to leave the story up to that point.
Thank you very much for your objective comment, best regards @deeanndmathews
You're welcome ...
@deeanndmathews, Thank you for engaging with other authors. Meaningful feedback, such as you offer, is helpful and encouraging to them.
You're welcome...
Buen trabajo amiga. Me parece excelente esa iniciativa para aprender a desarrollar buenas y cautivadoras historias.
Lo has hecho muy bien.
Thanks I have learned a lot these 5 days that the challenge takes, I invite you to realize it and from your beautiful poems build unforgettable stories. @eliezerfloyd
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Thank you @hivebuzz I take this opportunity to ask you how i can support someone else on Power Up Day?
Do i delegate from HP or hive?
Is it mentioned in that day's post or is it not necessary?
And how do i know if someone else gave you a delegation that day?
Powering-up is different from delegating.
When you power-up someone else, you are giving her/him your HIVE and can't get them back unless the person is willing to do so.
When you delegate, you still own your HIVE and can get them back whenever you want (with a 5 days delay).
Ok, I didn't know that.
And how do I know when someone has already been turned on by someone else that day?
Should I put that information in a post or not?
You can check it's account history on hiveblocks.com
Gracias 😘👍 @hivebuzz