These are scenes we can see as you describe them. The primitive nature of the environment, and of the girl's journey comes through. This ends up being a return to roots, though this is not what our protagonist expected. It is evident that you have this almost poetic tale worked out in your head. Sometimes it seems there are so many things going on that it is hard to put it all in one short story. If you look at this carefully, it would probably work better as a longer piece. When she is pushed in the river could be a very dramatic scene. The ride on the boat could be pages long. Her background, part Swiss and part indigenous, could be expanded greatly. And in the end, where she is promised to in marriage--this could be another section.
It's a good story. Think about how you might bring those different parts out and make your story truly into something like a journey into the wild--both memorable and symbolic.
Thank you for sharing this with us, @janesuiren. You like to write and have a lot to offer.
Thank you so much!🥰 You are right this is supposed to be a book. This tale is actually a masterpiece I've been planning to write in a book. Thank you for the encouragement🥺🥺
I never receive such words from my works before in other publishers, many many thanks @theinkwell 🙏🙏