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in The Ink Well2 years ago (edited)

This is a wonderfully crafted story. It has a flow of climax and anticlimax. The pace of the story builds and then relaxes, then builds again until that final delicious last line:

I had not bought tickets to the train

You keep a pace going that is almost comic, and yet at the same time a serious adventure. The image alone of the woman beating the thieves is hilarious. Then the fury of the thieves is turned on the narrator. Oh no, a frantic chase that barely ends in success. And then, as readers are about to exult in the narrator's victory, that wonderful, wry touch, he forgot to buy a train ticket.

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