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     3 years ago  

    Well, @ubani1, that is certainly an action story! Quite visual the way you describe it. All that gun play. Bruce took a chance, and won. This story does have a bit of blood. You have to be careful when you write violent scenes here but we let this pass because it wasn't really gory.

    Your descriptions of motivation are clear, and the story arc is strong. We appreciate that you post your stories in the Ink Well community. Please be sure to read the work of other writers in the community and share comments with them. We are urging everyone who posts in The Ink Well to take this step, going forward, to ensure our community members are supporting one another. (We also have this in The Ink Well community rules on our home page and in our weekly writing prompts.) Thank you!

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       3 years ago  

      This is an action fictional story. At first it seemed a bit like a movie story to me. And I was waiting for the opponent to come and fight. Anyway well written.

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         3 years ago  

        I don't really like mafia or gangsters stories, but this one has something catchy. I read It all.

        Nice development!

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           3 years ago  

          I was going to say that I love it when the bad guys go down in flames, but in this case even the good guys are bad guys! Ha ha. Fiction is funny that way, isn't it? We find ourselves separating people into right and wrong, good and evil, even if the "good guys" are only in that category because we've come to know them.

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             3 years ago  

            What an interesting, action-packed story! Gustav watched and learned first hand how to handle drug rivalry business. Too bad no one from the rival's team survived.

            Beautifully written. 🙂

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