No Escape
3 years ago in The Ink Well by ubani1 (62)
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I think Fred is f*#@ed-- unless he has excellent legal counsel at his disposal
An interesting story!
Looking forward to the continuation @ubani1
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This is an exciting story, @ubani1. You provide a good character sketch (for Fred). The assailants are described very well. The narrative flow is full of energy. Only one thing the reader wishes for that is not provided. An ending. We can assume that the police will arrest Fred, but this one left us hanging a bit. Otherwise, very well done.
Thank you for posting this most entertaining story in the Ink Well community. Thank you for engaging meaningfully with your fellow writers. This support strengthens the community and helps writers to improve their craft.
Hello @ubani1,
This is an action-packed story. Poor Fred was having a bad day before he was attacked. Things got worse after that. This is a great line:
When we read these words, we can imagine ourselves in Fred's place. What would we do? Fred fights and is lucky to get away with his life. Not so lucky to shoot someone. Now the police are at his door. Maybe he will be able to explain the circumstances and the police will leave him alone.
Meanwhile...that man with the knife is still free. Oh no!
This is an excellent story. Fred made a mistake in self-defense. But no one can control themselves in that situation, so maybe such a mistake has been made.
What a frightening scenario! Anyone living in a city and having to go out at night faces this risk. This is one of those stories where I want to shout out and tell the protagonist what to do. "No, Fred! Don't run! Call the police and tell the truth!"
Sadly he wouldn't hear me.