Oh no! @ubani1! You left the reader hanging! Such a good buildup. The reader likes Ories and cares about him. The reader worries about the children's folly in going into the cabin. As Ories follows his sister, readers know something bad is likely to happen. But so many threads here are left unfinished. What happened to the sister, who read the sorcer's book? What happened to Ories, who was left behind?
Perhaps you will rethink this end and give the reader greater satisfaction in a story that is quite interesting.
Thank you very much for posting this intriguing tale in the Ink Well community. You engage regularly with writers here. Thank you! Just a reminder to continue to offer your insightful support to fellow writers in the community.
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Hello @ubani1,
How skillfully you crafted an ending. The story is wonderful! Your skill as a writer grows every time you write. It is a delight to watch the process.
This is a really suspenseful story, @ubani1. At first I thought Sara accidentally cast a spell to make herself disappear. I would love to know who or what calls to them in the cabin. You really made the story creepy. Well done!
Reminds me of the old saying
"Curiosity killed the cat"😁
Now i'm sure Ories and his sister would not be sneaking around for a long time.
A beautiful work you gat here bro...
Keep it up👍
Oh no! @ubani1! You left the reader hanging! Such a good buildup. The reader likes Ories and cares about him. The reader worries about the children's folly in going into the cabin. As Ories follows his sister, readers know something bad is likely to happen. But so many threads here are left unfinished. What happened to the sister, who read the sorcer's book? What happened to Ories, who was left behind?
Perhaps you will rethink this end and give the reader greater satisfaction in a story that is quite interesting.
Thank you very much for posting this intriguing tale in the Ink Well community. You engage regularly with writers here. Thank you! Just a reminder to continue to offer your insightful support to fellow writers in the community.
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Hello @ubani1,
How skillfully you crafted an ending. The story is wonderful! Your skill as a writer grows every time you write. It is a delight to watch the process.
This is a really suspenseful story, @ubani1. At first I thought Sara accidentally cast a spell to make herself disappear. I would love to know who or what calls to them in the cabin. You really made the story creepy. Well done!
Reminds me of the old saying
"Curiosity killed the cat"😁
Now i'm sure Ories and his sister would not be sneaking around for a long time.
A beautiful work you gat here bro...
Keep it up👍