This is genuinely amazing writing!
Wow! whatever it is...You've got it my friend. I thoroughly enjoyed the piece from start to finish your descriptive qualities are second to none. I was in shock for a little while at the culmination I gotta confess. I am so glad you entered this contest just so I had the pleasure of stumbling across your work!
Your contest is hotting up my friend @averageoutsider.
I will of-course be back soon to upload the link to my story (think 700 words...think 700 words...Brevity) although feeling a tad inferior to @nathan-rokus I am joking of-course but not about his immense literary talent :)