Meet me in the cosmic sea
original poetry with reading
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Meet me in the cosmic sea
I wait for you until
life's color leaks away.
We are the sultry stars,
and we are salt spray.
I sit with folded legs
upon the gently sloping mount;
You are fiery morn,
and I am night's fount.
Your eyes a pearling galaxy,
your voice of boiling cloud
meets my tones of silk & lichen:
We converge as was avowed.
"I wait for you until
the fire's heart turns into frost."
You murmured through the wind,
by the wind your words were tossed.
You stood upon the summit,
The air called you away.
We are the sultry stars,
and we are salt spray.
Written by
@d-pend
4/11/18
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Art by
Gary Kezele
.1 — "Star Ocean" [cropped]
2 — "Frozen Spiral"
3 — "Deep Temptation"
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understanding your poetry is very difficult by reading it but the way you pronounciate it it helps very much to understand what you want to say,
nice poetry thanks for it man. have a nice day @d-pend
I usually dont like reading poetries on love and romance because that’s usually the only topic people have, but the way YOU can portray even rocks and sand seems amazingly beautiful , what should i say about you speaking about love !
The texture of cosmos in love truly made this poetry divine 😃
Beautiful as always :)
In the audio it says purple cloud ..I think
Fourth stanza, fourth line could be "by wind your words were tossed." shorter and lighter. and also the second line could use a touch, maybe removing the "the".
thethe ? really?!
#WhenTheTheStudentTriesToCriticTheTheMaster :D
I love❤️ how love❤️ can inspire you to make alovely❤️ love❤️ poem we'd all just love❤️
Your post is golden.. i think writing might have its advantages as well as & also nice post thanks for sharing
Nice poem you got here. I have already joined the discord channel. Find me with @empato365 on discord
I like your word in song or petry. your should keep it up.
You stood upon the summit,
The air called you away.
We are the sultry stars,
and we are salt spray.
A very fine romantic write I was thinking, but then the last piece of art has me thinking ... a fine poem about romantic loss. In the end, the heart wants what the heart wants:) Lucky for us poets:)
Lovely
The words are beautiful. The great poet is always charming in carving the word.
Lovely poem. Deep longing.
This is my type of poetry you know this one felt so beautiful, so pure and the setting for the romance was very dazzling Daniel it's really really been a while
I am night's fount
Waiting can be either painful or reason of joy. Its on individual that how does it take it.
poems like these are so awesome to read this made my day :)
At first I didn't get the salt spray. Now I sea. I'm looking forward to Thursday class.
There are, as we know, three modes of cognition: analytical, intuitive, and the mode that was known to the biblical prophets: revelation. What distinguishes poetry from other forms of literature is that it uses all three of them at once (gravitating primarily toward the second and the third). For all three of them are given in the language; and there are times when, by means of a single word, a single rhyme, the writer of a poem manages to find himself where no one has ever been before him, further, perhaps, than he himself would have wished to go.
Those are not my words, they were said by a Russian poet of the end of XXth century, he's revealed a poet's soul for me, I realized, that you guys are different from ordinary people. His words are about you, Daniel!
I've listened to this poem 3 times in a row - that's all I'm going to say! :)
"I am devoted and committed to you till eternity", those are the words this poem whispers in my ear. :)
This is really very lovely... I like the whole cosmic imagery... It is well suited for a love poem and it really gives life to the whole idea of this love poem......
And wow! I must say that love poems have never really been something I've been able to write well but you really made it look so easy... Well done, sir
With love
@ajremy (teen with steam for steem)
Oh my! I am loving your love poems -- one of the reasons is how you construct them to the universal. Most anyone can think you are speaking to them, and, there is also a sub-layer of the divine.
Bravo, D. <3
Why steemit dont have heart button? This poetry deserves much love... and love and more love