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     5 years ago  

    Glad to see You finally posted this one, Sir. Hopefully the feedback on Steemit will give You an incentive to finish writing it.
    i'm also glad You kept the conversation between Drevin and lucia the way it originally was. It's a little bit of a stretch to think Drevin's dialogue came from a six-year-old, but considering that He's royal-born and has been through a lot (watching his Father order his mother's death, for example), it's not impossible to believe He's more grown-up than His age would suggest.
    i really like the way Drevin doesn't apologize for His power over her even as He comforts her. That makes the point of how this society has raised Him to accept His superiority as axiomatic. He truly does treat her as a beloved pet, neither an equal nor a prisoner, and it's going to be quite intriguing to read how she responds as she grows up under her Prince's care.
    But then again, You know me well enough to know my interests. ;-)

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       5 years ago  

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         5 years ago  

        I think you should've gotten someone off of DeviantArt to draw a thumbnail for this instead of using a canned image (I'm guessing the "Druids" in this universe are Asian-looking), but other than the uninspiring thumbnail, the story works well. I like the way the characterization of the Druids as animals comes through in the narration and not just the dialogue. This kind of draws the reader into how this society thinks, and if we get something that's from Lucia's perspective later then it will make it that much more poignant.

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           5 years ago  

          Definitely glad for the warning, its certainly not for the timid and the warning let me know what to expect!
          Thanks for sharing.

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             5 years ago  

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               5 years ago  

              hello dear @bruce-pendragon, this is very nice;)) I am very curious about the character of lucia, I hope it has an important implication in the story !! congratulations and keep on

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                 5 years ago  

                Thanks for your feedback, and sorry for the delayed reply.
                Yeah, Lucia's an important character. She's actually the character whom the title refers to.

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                   5 years ago  

                  Although I love reading literature, this publication is very extensive for me at the moment. Today he read half. Tomorrow I will read the other half and then tell you.
                  For now I am intrigued with Lucia and Drevin Fan Bjorn.
                  Best regards, tomorrow I will comment with my appreciation. Regards @bruce-pendragon

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