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RE: All the Lines Function with Normality (Short Story Pt. 4)

in #fiction7 years ago (edited)

That's some twist to the story. I saw it coming though, with all the references to time in Part I.
I have to re-read and come up with a more articulate reading, but i like it. It keeps the fast-paced film-like description and this sudden stop, just like the surreal slow motion we experience in a car accident (at least i did once) changes the atmosphere for the better.
Great job.