A lot of work went into that so it would be good to have it shown to audience larger than here.
I will be boring and talk about technicalities mostly, like the one sentence I found with one ',' too much: 'Until he could take it no, more, and again, slammed his eyelids home.'
But also an idea:
I would personally suggest one thing - try to find an illustrator, even among Steemians, who would make a picture to replace the random pixabay one. I mean the story deserves its own. And I am positive there are those who would love to help. Check out the #crowdmind initiative, for instance.
Yours,
Manol for #steemitbloggers
You know, that’s some fantastic advice! I’ve lately been putting together a new cover picture - but I just can’t seem to get it right. I’ll definitly look into something like that! Thanks for reading, and for the comment!