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RE: A Thousand Windows

in #finishthestory5 years ago

You've written a rich delve into a fantastical dream setting. With such imagery as described in Vartan's dreams, one could make a silent film that would transfix viewers for hours.

Vartan maintaining his merchant mentality, seeing the beauty and wonders provided within the dreams as profit and prestige, sets a reader to wondering when the ax will fall.

You led us along, skillfully portraying that he was never content, always greedy to add more to his fortress of wonders and riches. In his mind, his deals were fair and he was the finest of merchants. Your reveal of his role in the story, when he finally looked upon himself with different eyes, was given with finesse. Then, upon waking and discovering the theft of the discs and note from Lupin, I couldn't help it. I clapped for your excellent ending.