Friendly advice: read this article about help for newbies on Steemit writing this kind of articles.
https://steemit.com/community/@tribesteemup/tribesteemup-s-curation-trail-is-up-to-21-followers-5-minutes-to-support-your-community-and-maximize-your-rewards
Also use more photos so article look more nice. You can use 5 tags.