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RE: All Alone- A Year On From The Outbreak/ A Writing Challenge

in Writing Club5 years ago

I feel so bad that I didn't see this when it was posted - I am so very sorry. Please accept this small tip. I loved the repetition in this poem which really emphasised the loneliness, and the sounds you created to lend atmosphere and poignancy.

I'm all alone in my big empty house,
with the drone of the air conditioner;
and the scampering feet if the mouse.
Unable to be mobile;
unable to get out into the sun.