I'm disappointed...I wanted more...
What a great opening for any number of outcomes.
We can't re-write our stories
I'll have to put that thought aside as I try to go to sleep tonight :)
Edit:
I want to be clear. I'm disappointed because it is so well written you had me hooked.
I only had fifteen minutes to put this together! A speed write, in a writer's group. :) I find my content tends to break apart a little more when it stretches out longer. It loses the impact, I try to to be too fancy, to controlled.
I like the flow of pieces like this. I recognise I can do longer things, but I struggle to uphold the quality for extended periods.