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RE: Burdened by Comfort

Whatever it is that you like about my writing, take it and use it in yours.

One thing that I like to try to do, and other people might not agree with me or think I'm successful at it, is make each line stand on its own.

By that I mean that I try to write each line so that it can be inconclusive, its own interesting statement, or the beginning of a story.

The lessons we teach our children are like stars works on one level, and on another level when broken into two lines.

Personally, I really like The lessons we teach as it's own line because it makes me wonder what lessons I teach and what lessons other people teach, also what lessons should be taught.

Then, the line Our children are like stars, I think, is an interesting statement.

I'm not quite satisfied with the final line of this poem, but I do think that it can stand on its own while still contributing to the whole.

As I said, whatever you like about my writing, use it in yours.

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I will use your poems for inspiration and figure out something similar in my life to write about.

It will come to you.