This one is heavy! I like how at first it seems oblique, and then all comes into focus. That's how it worked for me anyway.
to resent, or to be the resented, that is the question
That line can sometimes sum up relationships to a "T". This is a great one with a lot of layers. Great to see you writing again!
Thank you Eric! I have a bit of a breather before the next semester starts, and sure hope to get writing a bit more, and getting caught up! I have reading all seven installments of your story on my to-do list.
I love that it became clear at the end. I like to think that I captured an ambiance in very few words. It seems I may have pulled it off.
You're welcome! That seven is soon to be eight. : ) I've been working on the next chapter here and there but we were down at the Mayo last week. It gelled for me completely at the end. That's a challenge to convey the message when you begin to condense the words—but fun and great practice. I really enjoyed it.
That line caught my eye too!
And "sodden" -
And the wasp -
Every line, every word, creates an impact. I love this:
shoes torn up by rehomed dogs,
do-gooders to a fault
Just - all of it. Not bleak. Brilliant. :)