You use vibrant imagery, especially with phrases like "set my lips on fire" and "fire that dances, shadow in my heart." These metaphors vividly convey the intensity of the emotions you wish to express. I felt the kiss could have been expanded on to add even more depth to the feelings. Overall though the poem does a great job of capturing the bittersweet nature of remembering a past love.
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