I'd love to know what inspired this story.
The prompt of course.
There is one sentence that felt a little strange: "Kellerman finally looked at her, his eyes beating rhythmically." Eyes beating is not something one would usually consider. It feels a little jarring and out of place. Perhaps you could explain what is meant by this line.
My bad, I meant to write **blinking.
It's crazy because I actually read this piece over and over, I'm surprised I didn't catch it. You know grammar checkers don't usually pick such.
Finally, using AI images is perfectly ok in The Ink Well, but we do require that you state which AI programme was used to create them. On this occasion, I am curating your piece, but future stories need the image sourcing to be more specific :-)
Very well then. Thank you.