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You've taken a really interesting approach with this story, @adaopara. In just a few paragraphs, we see a man go from his birth to his death!

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Great concept! The excerpts from a person's life in a short story form is quite tough to do but you have accomplished it.

@camerafanatic, consider writing comments that help other writers to know why you liked their story. If you look at the comments on several different stories in The Ink Well, you will get some great ideas.