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RE: Lily

in The Ink Well4 years ago

What a satisfying story! It is a gift to me as a curator when I begin the day with a story as well constructed as this. You target the skill (describe setting) and the prompt (blossom) expertly. You create motivation and a narrative arc. Your dialogue is appropriate to the characters and circumstance.

As a curator I do have a couple of suggestions: in a story that is so skillfully constructed, it is disconcerting to find minor typos. These are not fatal errors, but since you took such care and used such imagination in crafting your story, it would probably suit your creative ambition to present a really 'clean' piece. Also, in one line you write that Winona turns and goes into her 'hurt'. I'm guessing you meant ''yurt'. Once again a minor error.

Usually I would not note these minor issues, but since you are a skilled writer with an obvious understanding of your goal (great writing), I'm taking the time to make these comments as @agmoore and not as Ink Well.

I've left a tip instead of a vote because I am recharging my VP for the day. Please write more stories. You do have talent.

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I am always delighted to read an honest feedback.

Also, in one line you write that Winona turns and goes into her 'hurt'. I'm guessing you meant ''yurt'.

The word is ‘hut’. I will go through my story again and make corrections.

Thank you so much for reading. I am so happy you liked it. I will keep writing.