Hello dear @kemmyb,
You are kind to read and comment. I'm sorry it took me so long to respond. I got distracted by other business and lost track of my replies on this story. I love replies. Reaching an audience is the only reason to write. A reply let's me know if I have reached that audience.
Your critique means a lot to me. You have a trained 'ear', so when you say it works I choose to believe you.
Thank you for visiting my blog. I wish for you a week (heck, why not a month?) that is both creative and productive.