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RE: The Real Game

in The Ink Well4 months ago

As a wife, I would find it difficult to dislike this story :) Nice character sketches. You also present the difficulty of the men in their marriages well.

It's a very short story (that's all we write in the Inkwell) so you didn't have a lot of time to show how the men changed their attitudes slowly. A week is a bit unrealistic for such a dramatic attitude turnaround--though it is very pleasing to me, as a wife :)

You write persuasively--you make your point. And your writing is entertaining.

I must mention that Tony briefly becomes Tobi. You might want to look at that again.

Nice story. Any wife would love it.

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Thank you for pointing my mistake. I was trying to make my story sound Nigerian at first but realized it's a global issue. Then I tried changing the names. I must have not fully edited it all.
Thanks for the kind words and thank you for reading. I appreciate.