Hello @mrnightmare.net,
You have a talent for describing subtle fluctuations in mood. You explain well why a character feels a certain way. Readers may be perplexed by Karyl's persistence, why she pursues Tristan's friendship even though he pulls away. However, this mystery is cleared up at the end when we learn that the two were friends as children.
The backstory about amnesia works well, but was a little confusing to follow. It worked out fine. We realize then that the confusion we feel arises from the confusion Karyl and Tristan feel.
It's a good story. Thank you!
Thank you, I've been wondering what should a character should express himself through words. Somehow I feel like I started learning it.
By the way I've been engaging authors.