I commend you on your correct subject/verb usage (none was):
None of them was able to cure anything more than a simple headache by chewing the bark of a white willow, but I needed to ask.
And I love the natural remedies at hand. And hope they work. Because that closing line - our narrator has brought death, like a contagion of COVID, is just too close to home!
Well done. :)
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The world building seems very strong. And somehow familiar, as if you've written other stories set in this world. Awsome! Imperial Mages are now gone... that's what made me think "I've been here before, in this world." Cool place to be. :)
I agree that there are a lot of similarities with some worlds from before, maybe it was unconscious for me - to escape somewhere familiar. Thanks for the constructive comment, as always, I am grateful for the time you took to read my story!
You're awesome at world-building. (I started typing a comment and it vanished. Now watch it appear twice.)
My point isn't if you are using the same world you've used in other stories, I approve!