You create a convincing extraordinary experience in this story. Most people have have felt the presence of something that wasn't there, but maybe was. Our eyes, our ears, our senses are not always reliable guides. In this case, Prisca trusts her sense of the cat over what 'reality' suggests to be true. Her sense is reinforced by the grandparents' report.
There are a few spelling errors in the story that interfere with the mood you hope to create. If you run this story through an online, free, grammar application the quality of your writing would improve.
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I love stories where only one person is able to see something - like a ghost or spirit, or an invisible friend. In this case the grandparents had seen it too, but they are no longer around, so she is on her own... just wondering whether the cat is a figment of her imagination. Interesting story, @cryptofi. Keep it up!
In this text you elaborate an interesting story, @cryptofi .
You dare to give more writing space to your imagination and make the reader stay with you, waiting to see how you solve the cat's disappearance: is he gone completely or does he still need the closeness of the person who loved him?
I like how you manage the exercise of putting yourself in Prisca's thoughts:
All she knows is that she keeps hearing the sound of the cat in other rooms. She knows what she heard.
This was an enjoyable little tale. I really like tales about animal's and their spirits.
What I noticed is that you have some grammar errors. I think a second round of editing or free tools like Grammarly can truly help with that. I don't mean to be mean in any way, but since my writing used to suffer from similar problems, I can't help but point them out.
I really hope you keep writing and I'd like to hear more stories from you!
You create a convincing extraordinary experience in this story. Most people have have felt the presence of something that wasn't there, but maybe was. Our eyes, our ears, our senses are not always reliable guides. In this case, Prisca trusts her sense of the cat over what 'reality' suggests to be true. Her sense is reinforced by the grandparents' report.
There are a few spelling errors in the story that interfere with the mood you hope to create. If you run this story through an online, free, grammar application the quality of your writing would improve.
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Cat spirit. I don't know about that, but I wouldn't want to live in that house :))
I love stories where only one person is able to see something - like a ghost or spirit, or an invisible friend. In this case the grandparents had seen it too, but they are no longer around, so she is on her own... just wondering whether the cat is a figment of her imagination. Interesting story, @cryptofi. Keep it up!
In this text you elaborate an interesting story, @cryptofi .
You dare to give more writing space to your imagination and make the reader stay with you, waiting to see how you solve the cat's disappearance: is he gone completely or does he still need the closeness of the person who loved him?
I like how you manage the exercise of putting yourself in Prisca's thoughts:
Continue with your writing exercises.
This was an enjoyable little tale. I really like tales about animal's and their spirits.
What I noticed is that you have some grammar errors. I think a second round of editing or free tools like Grammarly can truly help with that. I don't mean to be mean in any way, but since my writing used to suffer from similar problems, I can't help but point them out.
I really hope you keep writing and I'd like to hear more stories from you!