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Hi @ehrycarrh,

Welcome to The Ink Well. Please have a look around to see how our community works. Make sure to read our rules which can be found at the top of our community page.

Your story is too short, as per posting guidlines in The Ink Well Manifesto;
Stories should have a minimum of 350 words and a maximum of 2,000 words; our guidance is that the ideal word count range is 700 to 1,500 words for our online community.

You can also have a look at our Catalog of fiction writing tips.

We'd like to read your stories that comply with our guidlines in the future.
Thank you for your understanding, and keep writing!

You know what's great about this? It would make a really good beginning to a story. I want to read that story. This is almost a tease. Let your imagination wander and finish this. What happens after this character discovers that he/she is a cyborg? That's a tremendous conflict, coming to terms with this awareness.

You wrote this first part so well, I think you can do more. I look forward to reading the rest of the story.