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RE: A PERSON

in The Ink Well4 years ago

This story is beautiful, @abmakko. I love Thomas's discovery process. This old man who just seems to be no one of importance comes to life before his eyes as a real human being deserving of respect. While this theme appears in literature somewhat often, you've given it a fresh approach, and your lovely writing and excellent character descriptions make it a great read.

I really like your dialogue. You captured how dumbfounded he was by this interesting man on the street, without using those words. Instead, you expressed it in dialogue, which is an excellent technique.

"So... why... I mean, you are pretty good.. Ahem... how did you... what happened," Thomas asked with a concerned look.

Well done!

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I'm glad you enjoyed the read, I tried to exercise a bit of descriptive writing by trying to show actions without too much narration.

I also share your sentiments with Thomas discovery process, At the end of the day, we are all humans, sometimes it's easy to overlook humanity due to exterior appearance, thankfully Thomas left with a unique experience and perhaps a new friend.

Thanks for stopping by @jayna :-)