Hi @merit.ahama. I enjoyed your story! Though it has a sad ending, it shows that anything can happen in relationships.
I was surprised at the end when there was a shift to a narrator, because at first the story was told in "third person," which means the narrator is invisible to the reader, and the story does not have a presence or a personality. I think in a story like this, it is important to establish right away if there is a person who is telling the story.
I love to help writers who are learning and developing the craft of writing to improve their skills. I hope this helps you!
It helped a lot ma'am, thanks for the tip. I am glad you love the story anyway.