RE: The love at first sight: The ink well Prompt #52

Hi @raymondpeter. I was charmed by Peter and how shy he is. Learning how to approach a woman is not easy for that kind of person.

I thought I would share a few tips with you on formatting your story. You are using quotation marks for narrative, and then you're not using them for the things people say. You should do the opposite. Put quote marks only around the things people say, not information about them, or about what they are doing.

For example, you wrote it like this:

Peter and Jude his friend set for the aforementioned programme as discussed by both of them. When they got there, there was a lady who ushered them into the podium. The Lady was so pretty to the extent that no one will see her and will not appreciate the work of God in her life. Immediately Peter spotted her, he was shaking. He said, wow! Look at the beautiful Lady. Is as if I didn't see a lady in my entire life. Jude, can you see what I am seeing.

"Jude cuts in"...

Wonder shall never end, look at the person that is talking. You are just talking as if you know how to woo a lady. The only mouth you get but no action.

Here's how you should write it, with quotation marks around the dialog:

Peter and Jude his friend set for the aforementioned programme as discussed by both of them. When they got there, there was a lady who ushered them into the podium. The Lady was so pretty to the extent that no one will see her and will not appreciate the work of God in her life. Immediately Peter spotted her, he was shaking. He said, "Wow! Look at the beautiful Lady. Is as if I didn't see a lady in my entire life. Jude, can you see what I am seeing?"

Jude cuts in. "Wonder shall never end, look at the person that is talking. You are just talking as if you know how to woo a lady. The only mouth you get but no action."

I hope that helps you with your next story!