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RE: Fake Friends | Tomorrow prompt story!

in The Ink Well2 years ago

I really enjoyed this story, @restcity, even though aspects of it take me right back to the most painful aspects of my childhood! You write well, and do a wonderful job of integrating narrative, action and dialog.

There was one thing that caught my eye which you might want to fix. I think in this sentence, Dakota should be Louisiana:

“She sounds full of herself, saying her name is prettier than yours.” Mom told her, but Dakota didn’t care.

Nice work! Keep writing.

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You're right, that 'Dakota' should be Louisiana. Thanks for reading!