Hello @agmoore. Wow, a powerful hook. Your reader instantly knows something unpleasant is about to happen or that the outcome of the relationship has changed. Your story is crisp and to the point so that I know all parties' stance on the family matter taking place.
Words are powerful than people realize. Once spoken, they can't be retracted:
They were always a united front against him.
Children hear when you don't think they do and form an opinion about each adult in their lives. Speak ill often enough, and you have a negative view in a child's mind whenever that child thinks of your words.
I like how your story begins and ends with those powerful words never forgotten. An excellent story with life lessons.
Finally, thanks so much for including one of my fractal images from the LMAC Image Library. It certain blends well with the sky portraying the denseness needed for the headlights to cast the shadow. I appreciate it and your support.
Take care.
Hello my friend @justclickindiva,
Thank you for the cloud. I knew you'd have something in the library I could use, something perfect. Your technique is amazing. I'd copy it if I could, but I don't think I can.
I appreciate your comment. I wrote a book once that almost had an exact quote:
My statement was, "Children are invisible witnesses". And they do remember, what they remember affects them profoundly.
I appreciate your feedback and your positive comment. Writing stories is fun, but tricky for me, because they are more personally revealing than essays, or even collages.
I hope you have a most creative week. Looking forward to sharing jury duty with you.
I forgot to thank you for your amazingly generous tip. Really, quite, quite generous.