“Koko, I think the simians are plotting against our race. Look at them. I see them creeping and whispering in dark shadows and corners. It is like they are planning something, Koko. Why have they called for a conclave tonight?” Lelna spoke in a hushed tone as they passed by a troop of gorillas swinging from tree to tree in the cold breezy evening.
“I am starting to think that they had something to do with the plague that wiped out our parents and ancestors. Look at us now. We are young and helpless with little guidance on how to propagate our race. But them? they keep flourishing.” Lelna halted under a tree beside the river bank.
“No Lelna. We aren't helpless. Our strength is in our youth. Stop worrying. I'm sure it is nothing. It is their way of life. They live in groups remember?” Koko lifted his strong shiny dark arm and kissed the bulge that had formed on it. “If for anything, we've got this.” He then softly rubbed Lelna’s forehead to smoothen the creases that had developed from worrying.
Lelna brushed his hand off. She ran her hands across her thick black woolly hair. She then smoothened the sides of her parka that were made of cow skin.
“Can you ever be serious?” Lelna couldn't hide the smile that replaced the frown on her face.
“The Conclave is in a few minutes. Let's hear them out. Come on let's go. Our chiefs are also waiting.” Koko began moving east while pulling Lelna along. Reluctantly, she followed.
Koko and Lelna were among the surviving children. They traced their ancestry to the leaders of the human race in the era before the plague. They had found more than just friendship in each other. They found love and support. Together they became the voice and pillar of their race. They formed a strong lead to represent the people in the affairs of the land.
Before the mysterious human plague a few decades ago, humans and simians had been cohabiting in harmony and respect for one another. Then the plague hit earth affecting only the human race. It devasted the human population leaving only children as survivors.
Lelna and Koko got to the conclave in time for the meeting. The Simian heads and several chiefs sat on carved wood around a big fire burning in the middle. Behind the heads were hefty Baboons drumming a fierce rhythm. On the trees above them, bands of gorillas were belching loudly as they swung from tree to tree.
After Lelna and Koko took their seats opposite the Simians, the grand gorilla made a gesture with his index finger. The belching and drumming came to a halt. He lifted his head, looked straight into the flames, and began to speak.
“This meeting will be brief and straight to the point. We have come eras with you and your kind. For generations before the plague, we have lived in harmony with your ancestors. I know you have seen us lately getting together. Fear not. We have decided to take nature into our hands by coming to a unanimous decision. The fate of the human race depends on you now. We will become almost extinct and let you repopulate the earth once again. When we return, we will do that only as animals and not as a race. We shall never speak again.
“But on one condition. When your future comes speeding through the sky asking questions, you must tell them that we are ‘the missing link’. The link through which your race evolved and populated earth.” The grand gorilla peered harder into the flames. Lelna looked into Koko’s eyes and then stared at the burning fire. Through the flames, her eyes meet the grand gorilla's dark brown eyes. A lingering silence filled the air.
“We agree.” Lelna’s words broke the silence that pierced through Koko’s ears. The human chiefs began sharing glances. With a wave of the Grand gorilla's hand, the drumming and belching began again. The Simians began moving towards the forest until they disappeared with the sounds.
“Lelna why did you do that? We should have talked about it. All of us as one. What does he even mean by our future?” Koko spoke with a hint of unsettledness in his voice.
“I don't know Koko. But it seems fair to let us have our moments in the eras of life. Let us be as our ancestors once were. Many and merry. It is our time too. Some of us can even head north where it is colder to settle and populate the land there.” Lelna faced the other chiefs with conviction in her eyes. They seemed to agree with her.
Moons passed with most of the simians gone. The few that remained went about their business never speaking to any human again.
One night, Lelna sat by her hut watching the moon when Koko came running like a cheetah. Beads of sweat dripped from his strong pulp chest. He could hardly catch his breath when he halted before Lelna.
“There, by the river. Something came speeding from the sky, it landed in the bushes.” Koko finally steadied his breathing.
Lelna’s curiosity sparked. Together with Koko, they raced down to the riverside. When they got there, they found a big oval-shaped metal object surrounded by some humans and a few simians hanging on trees.
A ringing sound followed and then an opening emerged from the object. It revealed a human staring back at them. He had much paler skin and silky straight hair. A strange material covered his body. He was as stunned as they were to find humans in that space in time after following his coordinates.
“Hi. Do you understand me?” he waved his hands as he slowly came out of the object and approached them. Although they understood him, his accent sounded a little strange.
The humans nodded cautiously while watching every step he took.
“I don't have much time. My name is Dr. Brown and I'm a scientist from 2023. The future. My team and I have been on this project for almost a lifetime. ‘Studying human evolution.’ We built this time machine to come back into time and have a glimpse of where we missed out on evolution. I came to find the missing link. This is a test travel for sixty-five million years back in time. I've only got two hours.” he poured out.
Lelna looked at Koko and smiled. “Two hours is enough. Come let me tell you all you need to know.” she gestured to the stranger and smiled again. She would tell the story as it to the scientist. He would then return to the future with a theory of the missing link.
What an interesting story, I'm sure Koko and Lelna didn't expect that visit, it reminded me of many curious things from science fiction. I would have liked to know what would have happened after that meeting. In short, your writing is very good and entertaining.
Thank you so much. I thought about all the things we couldn't quite explain while writing this. I am not very good with continuity. Otherwise, I would have come up with a likely continuation.
I’ve always wondered where the theory of evolution came from. Hehe, now I know! Clever❤️💕❤️💕✨✨✨✨✨✨😊😎🥰🤗❤️
Haha. I wish it were that easy to explain. The origin of man and evolution is puzzling. Who knows 🤷♀️.
Thank you so much.
Clever story about clever monkeys. @kei2 your imagination soars here and the result is a marvelous tale about how humans came up with the theory of evolution. Very nicely done.
Your worldbuilding is also excellent and we can almost feel the heat of the flames that warmed that last conversation and we can hear the gorillas as they swing from tree to tree. Interesting and absorbing read.
Thank you so much. I had fun while writing this and I'm glad it was a good read. I love the tips and writing tools I get from here. They make it easier.
Fascinating :) ... It's as if culture has cycles.
Well done 🙌
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Thank you so much. I think they do, to be honest. Hehe.
If we look at the Aztec and Mayan cultures, they certainly had some technology that was lost for some time...
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Nice read from you kei2
I do wonder where you get your inspirations from. I already thought it was a jungle story but at the end it turned out to be evolutionary.
Thanks for sharing with us.
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Thank you so much. I wanted to incorporate the stone ages and evolution and the same time. I'm glad it was entertaining. The inspiration...hmmh I just tell myself I need to come up with something different.
Thank you for reading.
That’s the standard. I hope someday I can be like you.
That’s the standard. I hope someday I can be like you.
Lol. Stop flattering me.🤣
I am not 😆. You should be the next Soyinka and Achebe
Hehe. I claim it.
the pace of the story is fine, but I have some issues with the structure.
bear in mind these are only my opinions, so feel free to ignore, but they pulled me from the story.
1 - Time travel. I would really need to believe there was a plan behind the time traveler arriving when and where they did and it is not approached in the story.
2 - you have proto-human, gorillas, and present day human all sharing translatable languages. this does not work for me
3 - with regard to missing link, which one do you mean? current theory posits gorilla/human evolution diverged about 6ml years ago, with the split which led to humans/gorillas/chimps being 4 ml years before that. other than these there are numerous 'links' missing in the posited evolutionary lineage.
sorry if these are forthright, but they are questions I would have asked if this story came to me when I was First Reading for Fantasy & Science Fiction magazine.
I hope they help as you do further drafts
It's fine. I welcome honest criticism. It helps me develop further.
To be honest, everything in the story only came out as I imagined it in my head but I will attempt to clear it.
Thought not stated categorically. The traveler didn't arrive by accident. It was planned from the future.
I didn't present them as proto-humans. They were humans with the same DNA as present-day humans. The only difference with the traveler was in the phenotype. I presented them as congoids. I thought about the language but I concluded that it would work that way for my story. Maybe not🤷♀️
The human/gorilla link is what I attempted to reflected here but I admit that I didn’t work with the facts.
For point 1 an 'easy' fix is being more explicit that not only are they at the right time and place, but indicate how they were able to identify this point in history as the place to arrive at.
For 2 you have a bigger problem as, using current theories, by the time humans as we know them - homo erectus - were current it is so far beyond the point of evolutionary divergence from gorillas that a 21st century scientist would not be seeking a missing link in that time period.
I see the point you make. I think these are things to analyze and think about for future drafting as you mentioned earlier. Thank you for reading.
writing is rewriting.
it's the part of the task I don't enjoy. but it's great when you look at draft A after going through the editing process, and seeing how much things get better.
You are right. I think I share your sentiments. But after the work, it will be all worth it.
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Oh Jesus! Like this is realistic philosophy correlated with creativity. As in...this how these men come up with the theory that humans were once monkeys? hahaha. I see what you did there. Beautiful writing here darling. I am mighty impressed. You had me hooked from the first line
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Haha. Even I entertained that thought. Perhaps they just cook up believable and unbelievable stories as theories. Hehe. Thank you so much for your time. I highly appreciate it.
It is always a pleasure!
Your imaginative skill is really admirable. The story is really interesting.
Thank you so much for reading.
Wow.. jeez
You are really really good with this
I checked the words and said it was too much but guess what..... I finished without even knowing when I did so
I guess the scientist will really get the raw data since he met the person who knows exactly what happened to the link in the first place, Lelna
Thank you so much. I am glad the word count didn’t deter you from reading.
Oh, the scientist would get as much information as time permits. Then he’d go back in time with a new theory. Hehe.
I owe it to you ...it was a nice read
Wow, such an interesting story. Evolution is interesting, so many theories out there. But if time travel was truly possible, I wonder what we would didcover about our ancestors. Your imagination and writing never cease to amaze me.
Thank you so much. I think that if time travel exists, I would definitely go on a ride. Many things I would love to discover. Thank you so much.
What an amazing story! Simians and humans. 😅 I admire Lelna, she's a courageous character. You kept me on the edge of my seat, wanting more. Well done!
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Excellent story that you share with us.The evolution of humans is due to the apes. I loved reading this story with a sci-fi twist.
Thanks for sharing.
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Thank you so much for reading. I am very glad you enjoyed it.
A creative take on evolution - the gorillas made them do it! 🤣🙌 You have an interesting mind, kei... you never cease to amaze me with your creative approach and the wonderful tales that you weave. !LUV !ALIVE
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I'm telling you they made them do it. Haha😂😂.
Thank you so much. This is so encouraging.
Aww, how lovely of the simians to choose extinction to allow the human race go wide. I hope Lelna can see they did not mean harm now. And their future did come literally. I enjoyed reading your story🤗
Thank you so much for reading. Lelna was pleased with their decision to leave. It's what she always wanted.
I am sure she’s happy.
Time traveling sounds fun but dreadful at the same time. If you could time travel, what era would you go back to and why?
This is a good read. Brain-stimulating, too.
Yes, it does. If I could, I would go back to the beginning of time. So many things don't add up. Perhaps I would know where life is headed.
Thank you so much for reading.