I enjoyed the narrator's style in this story.
Agnes remained quiet a while, contemplating if she should spill the beans or not.
Out of pure excitement, she retrieves her phone to show the chat. Then things went south.
"Don't tell me you bought his bullshit."
The last one had me laughing. Usually, you'd want to stay away from slang phrases and colloquialisms, but in this story they work well because of the down-to-earth character of the protagonist. You have a great ear for dialogue and conversational style. Well done!
Oh thank you very much for your feedback. I appreciate it. I hope to do better tho. Got of the scene due to writer's block but I'm trying to get my game back...😅