That is very interesting! do you think you changed any of your meanings, or did you make them clearer? Were they just proofreading changes? Vocab choices?
So this is gruesome this poem. It's dirty and disgusting and leaves me in his rage, and I get regret, not sadness, not yet, there's still too much pride for sadness. Is the rewrite more gruesome, or less?
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The rewrite is no less gruesome, it is just clearer in the way it is arranged and some vocab changes. Also, I did change some of the imagery a little but it was a good 1st draft in how visceral it was before the proofread.
I'm older, and I hope, a better editor of my own work than I was at the age of 27 when this was originally written. I can't remember exactly what I changed in the re-write now. Lol,and it was only ten days ago, but I do remember that when I read it with my internal dialogue switched off, like someone who had never read it before or knew what it alluded to, there were parts that weren't quite clear.
So I focused on tightening them up :)