One night, it seemed like any other night before. But it felt different from other times, I was watching TV at about 1 am, while I was lying on the couch, with all the windows and doors closed, all the lights off. My name is Carlos.
When I had about 10 minutes lying on the couch, I could hear a noise coming from the kitchen, everyone in the house was asleep except me, I got up and before going to the kitchen I went upstairs and went through each of the rooms to see if everyone was still sleeping because I thought it was some of them wanting to play a little joke on me, but minutes after going through all the rooms I realized that it was only me who was still awake, when I went downstairs and went to the kitchen to see who was there, it turned out that no one was there, so I went to lie down on the couch.
Several minutes after checking the house and seeing that no one was awake, I continued watching the movie, I heard a noise coming from the kitchen again, I quickly got up and ran to the kitchen to see what it was and found my sister's cat, I took it and went to the couch with the cat to continue watching TV, but when barely 4 minutes had passed, I heard the sound again, but this time it was not the cat because it was still here with me, so I took the baseball bat I have under the couch to go investigate what was going on.
I get to the kitchen with the bat and turn on the light to have a better view of everything, when I enter and go through the whole kitchen I can't see anything. I let my guard down and went back to finish watching the movie from the comfort of the sofa, but once I was comfortable I could not stop thinking about what was producing the noise in the kitchen, I felt totally restless and a little scared not knowing what it was, I finished the movie and got up to drink water and then go to sleep.
The next day I told everyone in the house, but my grandmother with her things tells me: "The things you crash at night, they are always a mystery" and then I went to the gym, I return to the house late because when I leave the gym I went with a friend to drink some alcoholic drinks, I arrived home at about 12 am, I enter the house and I go directly to the kitchen to heat the food then I went to eat on the couch and when I was eating, I heard the same noise again as yesterday I got up to see and nothing, several times the same thing happened, the last time I heard the sound I went to see, but this time I could see what produced the sound, and it turns out that it was Antonio my cousin who had arrived yesterday and I had not even seen him, I was not warned that he was in the house, he is the cousin who loves to play a joke on people.
Note: Note: The drawings presented in this story are of my own authorship and was elaborated with Adobe Photoshop. I thank @theinkwell, for this fiction contest and I thank all the people who take part of their time to read my stories. Thank you all.
Hi @pjpavan. Thanks for sharing your short story in The Ink Well. We would have loved to see some more character development of the narrator!
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I loved Carlos' attitude after chasing the noise that bothered him with a bat, he realized it was his cousin who had arrived three days ago and wanted to surprise him. Have a nice day.