The place where the center of life, the motor of existence, the sacred symbol, was sheltered, emanated so much energy that everything around it glowed. Those who observed that spectacle from afar imagined that an internal fire was consuming it.
This energy field had the emotional, mental and physical control of the inhabitants of this place and in this way balance, peace and security were maintained. People lived a quiet life, without worries, without being stressed about tomorrow, they got along well with their neighbors, in short... an ideal life, in peace.
But a thought began to grow deep in some people's minds... free will.
"Marlene, my love. I don't know why, but this morning I woke up feeling like having a mango juice.
"¡But Pedro my love!, I made you the breakfast you should eat, the usual. Bread with butter and scrambled eggs, coffee and your juice of...oranges. But besides, there are no mangoes here, they don't produce them, I don't know where you get that idea from.
Alexandra and her friend Patricia go to school together, suddenly Alexandra comments to her.
"Dear friend, why don't we go to the forest? it's fun. We can see the plants and animals ”
"¡Alexandra!, we can't do that, it's time to go to school. Where do you get that desire, if you know that Sundays are the only days we can have fun” .
Luis arrives at work where they build parts for cars, he thinks and says aloud, "I don't want to continue working in this factory that exploits us.” His coworkers approach him in surprise
"What's wrong with you Luis, why are you saying that," says his friend Rodolfo.
"I don't know, it was something that came to my mind and I couldn't control it”.
And so little by little more people began to express their own opinions, their desires. The protectors of the engine of life were very concerned about what was happening. They knew that this could bring serious problems to the region. And they appointed a commission to investigate why control was being lost.
They went to the place where this important and necessary artifact was kept. It was hidden from people inside a hill planted with pine and eucalyptus trees. The vegetation concealed the entrance. The commission wore special suits that did not allow contact with the power of the source, otherwise they would lose their will.
They entered through a passage between the walls of the mountain and arrived at a wooden door and then into a large room in which a large black jade stone with bluish flecks was located, it had no brightness, only absorbed the energies of the people. Further ahead was a large computer where the thoughts of each of the inhabitants of the community were programmed. And up some rock stairs to the top of the hill was a luminous source that emitted a very bright and cold beam of light, whose function was to keep the other inhabitants away.
The team of researchers did a complete review of all phases of operation The Motor of Life and found no flaws that could explain the failures in the process of controlling the people. This was a very serious problem for the communities in the region.
sourceThe former inhabitants of the community were very violent people, who caused frequent conflicts with their generally peaceful neighbors. There was no way to stop the assaults they organized to steal the resources they did not produce, causing the death of innocent people. For years we tried to reconcile with them, to make them see that their attitude was detrimental to them and to others. They were approached to help them produce food and other products, but even when they accepted the help, in the end they returned to their destructive behavior.
When it was discovered that there was a rock that could absorb the energies of people and leave them without will and without thoughts, it was thought that this was the ultimate solution to the problem and a plan was initiated to control the population, and thus was born the project The Motor of Life.
Now after 100 years things have changed, generations of controlled people have given way to people who have begun to think for themselves. And the best thing about this process is that destructive thoughts have diminished and given way to constructive thoughts. Scientists continue to evaluate what is happening. It is possible that the human being, under conditions that limit his will and desires, can resort as a survival measure to the spirit, that which the source could not control, which was strengthened by thoughts that enriched it... making it stronger and stronger.
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This is a fascinating concept, the motor of life. In a way it might be analogous to the way many religions explain the conflict between will and responsibility. The rock that absorbs will is a necessary device in your scheme, and is symbolically interesting. Your descriptions are great. If there is one weakness (and this is mentioned only because you are a good writer and can benefit from an honest critique) it is in the second part. This is where you mention that over time people began to think for themselves. We, as readers, probably want a few words about why that happened.
Thank you for sharing this most interesting story with us. We appreciate that you engage with other writers.
Thank you very much @therinkwell for your comments about my story and of course I accept your criticism that helps me to improve. It's true, I didn't give more arguments to what was happening because it was important to understand the end of the story.
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Hello @popurri,
I didn't see this response...I wrote that comment. Mostly, I don't offer advice about how people can improve their stories (my opinion, of course), especially if the story is well written. In this case, my suggestion was a sign of respect, for your writing skills. As writers we all want to find the best way to express ourselves. I personally have never written a story that pleased me completely. Workshops in the past helped me to improve. Getting a pat on the back was never sufficient. I wanted to know how I could be better.
So, the story is great, but as a writer, addressing a fellow writer, I offered advice. I think you took it well. It is not negative to offer a suggestion. In this case it suggests that I think you are sophisticated enough to benefit from an honest, constructive assessment.
Your comment very honest and we are here to learn and improve, and that has happened since I started writing stories in this community. Every time I read a comment I feel very good and I appreciate it.
Greetings @agmoore and a happy day
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This is a very different use of the prompt, felt like I was seeing a movie (maybe a movie would portray this even more interesting to see).
The project (motor of life) is indeed the way out but what next after that... What happens to humans without wills and desire? Just imagining
Hello, thank you for your comment. It may happen that they remain unwilling or that their strengthened spirit allows them to change ... but that is another story.
Regards @merit.ahama.
Great! Thanks, I love your story
Today I was very surprised when I read @theinkwell comment on @popurri story. I did not read the story written by her before reading the comment, after that out of curiosity, I read the story very carefully because after reading some negative comments on her story, I could not believe that the story of an established writer like her can also be lacking. which has been a multiple-time winner. After reading the story, it was felt that some people in that place were controlled by computers, and their nature was changing by living as humans, their controllers were worried about this.
I have seen many movies on this subject, in which the desire to behave like human beings starts growing in the database of computer-created human beings and the day those machine humans will be filled with feelings and desires like the real human beings of the earth, that day there will be hardly any human life left in the world.
Thank you very much @fantom22 for your comment, very kind. I think I failed to explain in more detail why this process occurred in some people and not in others, even when I had it in mind I did not know how to express it and that was the criticism that @theinkwell made to me and it's okay because here I have learned a lot from the team that coordinates this community and the people who write here.
You are right this is an interesting topic because man is going towards that control and we do not know the consequences.
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@popurri don't worry this is not the last chance. You are a great author I hope you can do better in future.
Thank you very much 💐✨