Hi Jayna
Great character descriptions. I particularly liked the way you built a past between the three women. I tried to intimate similar between two of my characters, but I think I might have been too vague. There was more of a 'mean girls' or ladies vibe going on in mine 😂
The dialogue is fantastic. It builds really nicely to a real mystery cliffhanger type moment, leaving the reader wondering 'what is this disease'? Will Mr Caldwell be OK? The descriptive actions also progressed and informed the dialogue perfectly. Very nice!
Thanks very much for your thoughtful comments, @raj808! It was a really fun exercise. I love what you did with it!