I was as intrigued as you reading this piece. You kept me interested all the way through, and I was willing you to open the parcel so that we might all know what it contained. 😅 An enjoyable read. If I could add anything to this, it would be to edit your long sentences, especially the opening paragraph, into shorter sentences. Each separate thought requires a separate sentence so that the piece reads better as a whole. It will certainly elevate your writing if you use an editor to achieve this.
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I'm glad you liked it, thanks for your advice, I'll take it into account, greetings 🤗