I would really like to see you develop your writing @hillarypowers, rather than posting small pieces each day. This is a good opener for a story and could develop into a very good story arc. Please read the writing tip about creating a story arc, and have a look at the tip about editing your work before submitting your post.
Have you read the reviews for this week's Challenge by @oredebby and @marcybetancourt here and here? Have you thought about entering the Challenge yourself? It would help you to improve your writing.