Hey there my fellow hivians due to my life as a student balancing making post and concentrating on my studies had been a challenge, but I decided to find time to write on this week's prompt, I hope you enjoy.
Clay sat in his cell as he wondered how his life had turned out, he had only one toilet, a bunk bed and his few set of books. He wanted more for himself ofcourse but the challenges of the world had made him face such fate. In the cube maximum Security Prison, they had power dampers they wore around your neck that restrict people from using any of their abilities.
Clay wondered how it came to this, he remembered the point he went over to the dark side, it was Christmas of 1999. Clay was kicked out of his foster home because he was overage and was forced to live on the streets, he had been alone since then and nobody seemed to care, that's when he decided to use his powers to fend for himself.
In Clay prison cell, there were marking on the wall, with calculations consigning time and motion. The warden thought he was crazy, so they allowed him to do whatever he wanted in his cell. Clay's powers had always been a mystery to the warden because he looked and acted normally. Some of the inmates often loose there power dampers but they don't get far due to the strict security of the Cube maximum security prison.
Clay had been giving a portion of his ration to an engineer called Mark David. Mark had created a tiny device that could generate an electrical surge in the power dampers and give Clay a chance to escape.
Clay had been preparing himself as not to make a mistake, he wanted to tell the accurate point in time that might be able to stop himself from going over to darkness. If he could change his past, his present time would change and that moment in time will cease to exist.
This is a wonderful story of redemption. You use the science fiction elements credibly. Your character development is also excellent. Good writing.
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The story is interesting and offers a novel perspective. We are sympathetic with the protagonist, Clay. would be wonderful if we could all change the past like that, wouldn't it?
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What a wonderful story, the moral lessons, and concepts. He reminded himself not to give up the world.
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That was a nice story, I like how he decided to change his past self and how he planned how to do so.
I was going to ask if the older Clay could interact with the younger one without messing with time itself but then everything seemed to balance the moment you mentioned that the older one faded away.. That way, your story corresponds with every time movie I've seen. 😁
That's great that you were able to find time to write a story even though you're busy with your studies! This story has a very enjoyable theme. Wouldn't it be wonderful to go back in time and fix our errors of the past?
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Congratulations, @sonofremi, your story has been selected for The Ink Well's short story highlights magazine: https://peakd.com/hive-170798/@theinkwell/the-ink-well-highlights-magazine-30.
This was really enjoyable :) I hope Clay has a bright future!
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I never thought you were an author... This is beautiful. He went back just to rewrite his wrongs? Oh my God. I might cry...😩🤧
Wow. I'm glad i found out