This story is told with such energy. The movement is forward, dynamic, from beginning to end. Your conclusion is really effective. We do have a problem that you might understand. We have curated the story because it is really good and told with such vividness. However, when the teenage boy is restrained and medicated in the end, it reads almost like abuse
They all charged at the teenage boy and grabbed his legs and arms. After his movement is restricted. A male nurse stabs a syringe into the upper right arm of that schizophrenic boy
Especially the stabbing part. There might be a way to describe this scene that makes it less brutal. We are extremely sensitive to brutal treatment of children in the Inkwell.
Sometimes authors write a vivid story like this and then they explain that it was all a dream. That is a dreadful ending. Your device, a patient in a mental hospital who is hallucinating, is more more creative. It is actually sad. But that's the story, isn't it?
Thank you for sharing this with us, @adhyaksaardaus. We appreciate that you engage with other authors in the community.