This is a satisfying story. You might want to reconsider the line where Dean kicks the dog. That doesn't sit well with many readers. He can chase the dog away without kicking it. The character loses sympathy with such characterization. It would have been really nice (but perhaps unrealistic) if Dean offered the dog a place to live after that rescue.
The relationship between Dean and Ana is described well.
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I've been expecting your reply. Took a bit longer than expected, must be a lot of entries. I've edited the part about kicking the dog, I'm sorry, I didn't know it would be offensive.
I'm glad you find my story satisfying. Thank you for consistently training our imagination by dropping various thought-provoking prompts every week.
!PIZZA