You write this with a good sense of humor, @cinygirl. The story bounces along with Mario sort of being a foil for Glory. She may be annoying, but she is a strong character.
You throw us into this story with little introduction. We catch on eventually that these two are lost at sea and sharks are all around. A clearer introduction would help readers understand the thrust of the story.
There is disorganization in the piece, but your humor redeems it. In the end, we can't help cheering for Glory and feeling a little bit of sympathy for poor Mario, who does not seem to be her match.
Than you for sharing this with us, @cinygirl.
Waw. This is a complete assessment of my story.
Thanks team inkwell for the encouragement.
I appreciate