Susana experienced a ghostly encounter that brought her closer to the spirit of her mother. You narrate the story in linear fashion that structures the piece well, but your story would benefit from more interactive dialogue. Also, for short fiction it’s good practice to include a conflict and a resolution, so as to engage the readers’ attention.
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Hello, thank you very much for your advice, I will take it into account.