It's amazing how large an impact one human being can have on us, isn't it? It sounds like you fell for her hard, and it was difficult to pick yourself back up again. But certainly it's one of life's great lessons that powerful people can distract us from the path we're on!
Thank you for sharing this intriguing story in The Ink Well, and for reading and commenting on the work of other community members. We have one tip which is to integrate more action and dialogue into your narrative. Stories that are all narrative do not involve the reader as much as those that use all three of these storytelling elements. We have a great article on this topic in our catalog of fiction writing tips, titled Action, Dialogue and Narrative, the Dynamic Trio.
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